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Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways had techonolgy affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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Technology
 is really transforming
people
’s lives in various ways, it has a negative effect on
people
 because they forgot about real life, and always sitting in front of their phones. Certainly, in the past when phones didn’t exist,
people
 interacted more lively, they were used to meeting each other in streets, and parks.
Nevertheless
 today,
according to
 statistics 85% of the population in the world interacts with each other only through phones or computers, and most
people
 can’t afford to meet their
friends
 from different countries. Needless to say, it’s not always affected badly, because ,by means of ,
technology
people
 make some presents for their
friends
 and send them by email. And
also
technology
 is really needed for some workers
such
 as workers or product cooperation with other companies, it’s necessary for their job, but unfortunately inferior for eyesight, and gives headaches. The big problem in our society is that
people
 are obsessed with
technology
, they don’t wanna do other things except sit in front of the phone, and they might make some
friends
instead
 of watching senseless videos. From my perspective, these kinds of
people
 avoid meeting their
friends
, and family, they are just trying to make their own world on the Internet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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