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Some people believe that a significant difference between a parent’s age and their child's age is a good thing. Do you think the advantages of a significant age gap outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
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 present world, the economic pressure brought by housing prices has made young
people
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 more willing to focus on work rather than start a family, which has led to a tendency of late marriage.
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,
people
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 who marry late will have a big
age
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 gap with their offspring, and some consider it can bring advantages. In my opinion,
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 a large
age
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 gap may lead to losing common topics between
parents
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 and
children
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, I still consider its benefits outweigh its drawbacks because those senior
parents
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 are able to accompany their kids more.
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 with, the
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 of those young
parents
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 may affect the time to stay with their
children
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.
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, playing video games and going to bars are very popular among young groups, and sometimes it is difficult for younger reject invitations from their
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,
by contrast
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, older
parents
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 usually have a
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 to organise family activities.
For
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this
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 reason, older
parents
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 are more likely to accompany their offspring and it is quite important for their heir's growth.
On the other hand
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, it is common to see there are rarely common topics between
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 who have a big
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 disparity.
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, older
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 like traditional things
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 as watching opera,
while
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 younger like modish things.
This
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 may
also
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 occur in families with significant
age
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 differences. But I think the barrier can be broken as long as these older
parents
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 maintain a young mindset and keep communicating with their offspring more.
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,
children
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 can
also
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 learn useful
life
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 experiences from their
parents
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. In conclusion, A family-centred
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 of older
parents
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 gives them more time to accompany their
children
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's growth. Despite families with excessive
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 differences
may
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that may
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 lack common topics, long-term companionship and communication can solve
this
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 problem.
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, I believe the advantages of a significant
age
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 gap are greater than their disadvantages.

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