In many countries, people increasingly talk about money such as how much they earn or how much they pay for things in their daily conversations. Why? Is it a positive or negative trend?

Recently, the issue has been brought into focus is nowadays
money
is one of the most essential things in
human’s
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life
. Some
people
these days tend to discuss more
about
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weath
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health
and how they use their
money
in
life
. In my opinion, it brings both advantages and disadvantages. In
this
essay, I will outline these two reasons. One thing
that is
of great significance is that we
are
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live
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in
development
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period and
money
plays an important role in each
life
. There are many reasons for
money
which
is appear
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in all the
conversation
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that everything around is related to
money
. For one thing, humans can show their ability
in
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make
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financial decisions. For another,
people
also
can model sensible purchasing behaviour and explain what they are doing and why to other
persons
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. The most familiar example of
this
is equipment, health
such
as tonics,
vaccinations
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, .. still have to use
money
or pay
cost
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to
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standard
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of living so in Viet Nam
people
often share with their
neighbor
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about
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how to use
money
in a reasonable way. It seems quite clear that when adults discuss a lot
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knowledge
about
money
, they
are
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easily more opportunities in both
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and
life
improvements. It is
also
well-known that there a still some
drawback
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if
people
keep
talk
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and
listen
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about
money
but do not make everything better by solving the problems at all, it just lose track of time and
not
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bring any benefits. The immediate result it produces is that
people
can easily get distracted by
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wealth
discussion
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and they feel more stress in their daily
life
. It
make
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no difference that daily financial conversation will take away their working energy. In summary, it is vital that humans should talk about
this
topic.
In addition
,
people
should know how to discuss with each other in an irrational way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • materialism
  • financial transparency
  • societal taboos
  • economic fluctuations
  • financial management
  • financial literacy
  • purchasing decisions
  • wealth glorification
  • economic stratification
  • social comparison
  • peer pressure
  • income disparity
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