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In many countries, people increasingly talk about money such as how much they earn or how much they pay for things in their daily conversations. Why? Is it a positive or negative trend?

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Recently, the issue has been brought into focus is nowadays
money
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 is one of the most essential things in
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life
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. Some
people
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 these days tend to discuss more
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weath
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health
 and how they use their
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 in
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. In my opinion, it brings both advantages and disadvantages. In
this
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 of great significance is that we
are
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live
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 in
development
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 period and
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 plays an important role in each
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. There are many reasons for
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 which
is appear
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 in all the
conversation
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 that everything around is related to
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. For one thing, humans can show their ability
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make
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 financial decisions. For another,
people
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also
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 can model sensible purchasing behaviour and explain what they are doing and why to other
persons
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. The most familiar example of
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 is equipment, health
such
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 as tonics,
vaccinations
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, .. still have to use
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 or pay
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the cost
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to
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standard
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the standard
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 of living so in Viet Nam
people
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 often share with their
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about
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how to use
money
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 in a reasonable way. It seems quite clear that when adults discuss a lot
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of knowleadge
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knowleadge
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knowledge
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, they
are
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easily more opportunities in both
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 and
life
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 improvements. It is
also
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drawbacks
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 if
people
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 keep
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talking
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 and
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 about
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 but do not make everything better by solving the problems at all, it just lose track of time and
not
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 bring any benefits. The immediate result it produces is that
people
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 can easily get distracted by
weath
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wealth
discussion
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discussions
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 and they feel more stress in their daily
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. It
make
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 no difference that daily financial conversation will take away their working energy. In summary, it is vital that humans should talk about
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,
people
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 should know how to discuss with each other in an irrational way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • materialism
  • financial transparency
  • societal taboos
  • economic fluctuations
  • financial management
  • financial literacy
  • purchasing decisions
  • wealth glorification
  • economic stratification
  • social comparison
  • peer pressure
  • income disparity
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