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Some people want government to spend money on searching for life on other planets. However, others think it is a waste of public money when the earth has so many problems. Discuss these two views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, it is argued
that
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whether
governments
 should allocate so much
money
 to explore space and stars, searching for other lives.
Although
 pursuing
this
 kind of scientific target has its benefits, I strongly believe that spending taxers'
money
 on tackling the
problems
 of
earth
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 is far more a necessity. On the one hand, exploring other
planets
 has its upsides.
Firstly
, it is an excellent way for us to broaden our horizons. The new findings from other
planets
 may give us inspiration,
thus
 pushing us to produce new types of things.
Secondly
, since there are more and more
problems
 on
earth
,
for example
, climate change and the decrease in biological diversity, a new planet with a suitable environment for people to survive may provide another choice for us. If one day, the issues on
earth
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 are too difficult to solve, we could take moving to another planet into consideration.
On the other hand
, considering the truth that there are so many unsolved
problems
 on
earth
, I think its benefits are overweighed by its detrimental influence. First and foremost, the more
money
governments
 spend on searching for new
planets
, the less would be left to solve the
problems
 on
earth
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Earth
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. I concur that mother
earth
 is a blessing for us human beings.
As a result
, it is our obligation to prevent her from being damaged.
Furthermore
, the
problems
 of the
earth
 are not too bad, it is not very difficult for us to solve as long as
governments
 have abundant
money
.
For instance
,
governments
 could increase subsidies for new-energy vehicles to reduce carbon emissions, which could help us to tackle the problem of climate change. In conclusion,
although
 I admit that exploring other
planets
 has its upsides, I do believe that we should set a priority for solving the
problems
 of the
earth
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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