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The table in the above image shows the source of money for the police budget. The chart shows how it was spent. Both of these images capture data from the year 2017 to 2018.

The table in the above image shows the source of money for the police budget. The chart shows how it was spent. Both of these images capture data from the year 2017 to 2018.
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The table and charts show us how British
police
 in one area
was
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were
show examples
fund
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funded
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 in 2017 and 2018 and how it was distributed. Totally, we should note the growth of investment in
this
 field from 304.7 m to 318.6m
due to
rising
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the rising
show examples
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
amount from each source.
In addition
, the percentage of money spent by the departments has differed in
certain
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a certain
show examples
period
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periods
show examples
. Looking for details, the highest sum for
police
 was contributed by National Government. The lowest one turned out to be the “other sources”. The former brings to
police
 more than 175
million
 pounds in 2017 and increased the contribution by
extra
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an extra
show examples
 2
million
 in 2018. The latter gave just 38
million
 in 2017 and slightly raised the sum in 2018 by 0,5
million
. Meanwhile, the preferences
of
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for
show examples
wastes
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waste
show examples
 are
also
 changed. In 2017 the third was spent
for
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on
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 salaries and remain quarter was used for paying a technology, transport and buildings. In 2018 officers’ and staff’ salaries dropped and took only 69%
from
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of
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annual
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the annual
show examples
 budget. Wastes both for buildings and transport increased about twice and turned into 14% of
total
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the total
show examples
. At the same time,
technology
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the technology
show examples
 showed stable
wastes
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waste
show examples
.
Overall
, funding of
police
 in one Britain area constantly goes up in
certain
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the certain
show examples
period
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periods
show examples
. But ways of spending
this
 money
changes
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change
show examples
 from year to year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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