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The table in the above image shows the source of money for the police budget. The chart shows how it was spent. Both of these images capture data from the year 2017 to 2018.

The table in the above image shows the source of money for the police budget. The chart shows how it was spent. Both of these images capture data from the year 2017 to 2018.
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The table and charts show us how British
police
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 in one area
was
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were
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fund
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funded
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 in 2017 and 2018 and how it was distributed. Totally, we should note the growth of investment in
this
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 field from 304.7 m to 318.6m
due to
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rising
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the rising
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of
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apply
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amount from each source.
In addition
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, the percentage of money spent by the departments has differed in
certain
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a certain
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period
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periods
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. Looking for details, the highest sum for
police
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 was contributed by National Government. The lowest one turned out to be the “other sources”. The former brings to
police
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 more than 175
million
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 pounds in 2017 and increased the contribution by
extra
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an extra
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 2
million
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 in 2018. The latter gave just 38
million
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 in 2017 and slightly raised the sum in 2018 by 0,5
million
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. Meanwhile, the preferences
of
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for
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wastes
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waste
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 are
also
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 changed. In 2017 the third was spent
for
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on
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 salaries and remain quarter was used for paying a technology, transport and buildings. In 2018 officers’ and staff’ salaries dropped and took only 69%
from
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of
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annual
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the annual
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 budget. Wastes both for buildings and transport increased about twice and turned into 14% of
total
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the total
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. At the same time,
technology
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the technology
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 showed stable
wastes
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waste
show examples
.
Overall
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, funding of
police
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 in one Britain area constantly goes up in
certain
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the certain
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period
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periods
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. But ways of spending
this
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 money
changes
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change
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 from year to year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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