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The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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We are now living in an era in that social
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 is developing rapidly and becoming one of the most important communication tools for humans. So it is very beneficial to access social
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 but I think we can hardly overlook its disadvantages. In a developing society, we can not deny the importance of social
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. It makes our life more convenient with fast speed and exact information. Social
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 gives us an easy way to contact other
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 from distant places.
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, I can see my family and friends through my phone’s screen without meeting them and I can
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 chat with many
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 without writing letters or sending emails. We can
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 find it easier in our jobs by using social
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such
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 as Messenger, Facebook or Zalo. A message with immediate notice can provide us with many important updates about work;
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, we can fix or make some significant changes in a short time.
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, the rapid increase of social
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 can
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 bring many dangerous threats to interaction among many
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.
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, we are sharing too much on the Internet and have no awareness of information theft. It means your phone number, id, email or private address may be leaked to criminals.
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, many strange
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 on the Internet are not trustworthy because we have very little information when talking with them.
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,
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 social
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 helps us much in keeping contact with other
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, it
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 makes us passive when we have face-to-face conversations.
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, if we don’t get used to meeting and talking with other
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 outside, the way we react to what others say will be very slow and unnatural.
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, when we have a job interview, the ability to talk and answer naturally and fluently is an important factor to make employers satisfied. In conclusion, the advantages of social
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 are undeniable in our lives today. But if we spend too much time on these apps, we can miss many vital and important skills and experiences which are very helpful in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interaction
  • geographical barriers
  • global community
  • cultural diversity
  • economic opportunities
  • superficial interactions
  • mental health impact
  • loneliness
  • depression
  • interpersonal relationships
  • real world
  • spread of misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • societal polarization
  • informed citizenship
  • constant connectivity
  • maintain relationships
  • fast and efficient
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