Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. What the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective reducing crime level?

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about
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crime
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are
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increasing rapidly
world wide
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worldwide
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some
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cases
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youth offenders. In my personal
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opinion
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caused
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by several
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infants
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which includes living in poverty and violent condition. The most vital factor is
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poverty
, especially in
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communities
where have
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gap between poor and rich.
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, some young people living in harsh environments where accompanied by violence,alcohol, and drug abuse,
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cannot access
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education or drop out of school at
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age.
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, they cannot find skilled jobs to support their life.
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, they tend to use illegal
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to gain an income.
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, some of them may
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by
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surrounding
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become a member of gangsters even real
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criminals
.
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easy problem to tackle with. It requires governments
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complete
implement
regulation
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to help
young
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generation
from
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education and
empolyments
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employment
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aspects.
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, governments should fund
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insititutions
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institutions
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not only promote literate but
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teach practical techniques to support citizens from poor families.
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,
goverments
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governments
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can
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improve
environment
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of communities, specifically,
high
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criminality
area
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.
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establish
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programs to help people
reducing
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drug and alcohol abuse and provide more job opportunities
as well as
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afford
housing
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. I suppose it can
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crime
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level
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and generate a
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society. In
concultion
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conclusion
,
althought
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although
crime
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rates are rising in some
place
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places
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, human societies can still combat
theseissues
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these issues
by raising
living
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the living
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standard
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standards
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and lowering
crime
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rates.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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