In many countries, school children are required to wear school uniforms. Do you think this should be enforced in all school?

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a lot of
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in the world,and
also
in
allmost
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almost
countires
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countries
,students are required to wear
school
uniforms.
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some
school
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schools
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do not have
school
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a school
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uniform
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uniforms
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.I think
this
should be enforced in all
school
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.
This
essay will show you why I think so
that
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and give some reasons. On the one hand,there are several reasons why I think
this
should be enforced in all
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.The most main reason is that we can
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focus
on
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.If
shool
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do
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not have
school
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uniform
,we have to
choose
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own clothe.Clothe has a lot of
kind
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.
Such
as, cool,cute,looks like
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and so on.So if some
people
wear
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couple
clothe
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and
also
some
people
wear looks like sexy
clothe
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,we are
difficulte
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difficult
to
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on
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study
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.I think that
school
unforem
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is one way that we can more
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in class.
Secondly
,in the long
run
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uniform
is
cheper
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cheaper
than
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plainer
clothe. And some
people
are
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because some
people
want to
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wear
like
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my
friend
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clothe
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so I want to
buy
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,
however
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I do not have money so I can not
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.So,if wear
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uniform
,we can not know how
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that
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classmates
clothe,and
also
we do not feel
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parents
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income.The third reason is
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is kind of
envoroment
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environment
because
student
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students
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wear
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uniform
weekday
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so all most wear
school
uniform
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a
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week.So
student
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do not
a
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lot of clothes buy. In
counclson
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conclusion
,all
school
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have to
required
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to wear
school
uniform
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because there are several
benefit
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for
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student
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.The most reason is that
student
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more
foucas
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focus
on
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a study
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study
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in class. I think if it is done the way,
student
's
score
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. are increase.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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