It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

It is argued that
risk
is a vital thing in people's vocational
lives
and
also
their private
lives
. I completely agree with the idea that everybody should take some
risks
to develop their
life
. There are a number of reasons why I believe individuals have to take
risks
in every
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of their
life
and it has some positive consequences. One possible reason is that if we take
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, we will gain perseverance and patience. When we take
a
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work
, we know that it has uncertainty . We have to do the
work
again and again for fixing it as
lifelong
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.
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Robert Bruce could not win his war at
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is why he left the war
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then
he saw a spider which tried to make a spin which was trying again and again and after six times attempts the spider did it. After seeing it, he understood that he had to be patient for his victory.. another reason is that it helps to remove fear. If we pass our
life
through the fearless, we can not take
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risks
.
Moreover
, we have to be strong and fearless and
risk
is a suitable way to demolish it.
In addition
,
risk
makes us creative and helps to gain experience
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the
work
field.
Furthermore
, as we move varieties of
work
, we may
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fail.
As a result
, we will get careful about our mistakes
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we did previously and will fruitful
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in future by using our experience and idea.
However
, we will be
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successful and brave
person
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people
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. If we read the
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history, we
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that they took a plethora of
risks
in their professional and personal
lives
and the after some difficulties they get success in their
life
.
For instance
, our president Bangabandhu Sheikh Mujibur Rahman took various types of
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during
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1972 to get
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freedom
of
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Bangladesh. Even he did not think about his and his family's
lives
. What is more, we should follow the Nobel and brave person footprints and have to learn how they take
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and achieve their goals. In conclusion, considering the factors about. I believe if we take some
risks
in our
life
, it will be good for our establishment through the personal
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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