the diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles.
The figure illustrates the full process of recycling plastic
bottles
.
It is clear that
the process contains nine stages and in each stage
a specific activity will be done Add a comma
,stage
such
as sorting and heating.
First of all, individuals put their used bottles
in the garbage bin then
the special lorries carried the bottles
to the recycling centre which
the Correct word choice
where
bottles
will be sorted and the ones that are appropriate will be sent to the next step. The gathered bottles
are compressed into blocks and after that
the blocks are Crushed by a special machine. Add a comma
,that
Moreover
, after they will be washed , they are converted to pellets by a machine and after that
by applying heat to the plastic pellets the raw material will be formed.
After all the raw materials will be used to make new merchandise Add a comma
,that
such
as bottles
, T-shirts and pencils , so the cycle will be continued again and again.Submitted by arsalan.azizzadeh on
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