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Every year, many people move to large cities to live and work. This is one of the biggest problems in the world today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The migration of
people
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 to large
cities
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 has been seen for a quite long time. It has been regarded as
one
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 of the huge concerns around the world. To some extent, I agree with
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 statement but
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 I am not against
people
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 moving to big
cities
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 for better lifestyles and careers.
To begin
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 with, citizens from small towns and rural areas tend to move to larger downtown to seek more conveniences
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 there are obviously better health and educational resources
one
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 can only dream of having in small
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.
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, there are more opportunities to get better employment and
one
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 can lead a good life having more amenities.In
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 way,it becomes the need for a family to leave their home town and move to big
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.
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 movement of the public to big capital has overburdened them with overpopulation and depletion of resources,
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, some major issues like traffic, water shortage, and gas load-shedding have taken birth in
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 areas.
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,
people
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 have to live separately far from their relatives in the new big city which creates distances among families.
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,it creates difficulty for the administration to accommodate more pupils in
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 in order
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this
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, despite of many drawbacks of migration to big capitals, it is always
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's choice to move to seek jobs and facilities .
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 government must take steps to control overpopulation and should
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 provide all the facilities in small regions so that
people
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 should stay there with more satisfaction and contentment.
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