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According to most projections, the world’s population will continue to rise, until it plateaus at 9 to 11 billion in the latter part of the 21st century. Without a doubt, population growth represents the largest problem facing humanity at present. Do you agree that this is the greatest issue faced by us today?

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 that
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 of
population
, the
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service
 of common people is becoming harder day by day. In relation, I
am
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also
 agree that there are
alot
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a lot
 of problems that are rising in
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to
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 the growth of
population
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. To commence with, pollution is one of the mammoth
issue
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 resulting
through
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 the phenomenon of increasing communities. To illustrate, in order to maintain living
structure
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structures
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 for societies and to provide them with shelter, a large number of trees are being
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 down every year. Needless to say, trees are highly important to reduce CO2 and put up O2 which helps to build
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pollution free
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 environment.
For instance
, It was published in National Geographic Magazine, that every year 15% of air pollution is
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ruining
rising
raining
 only being deforestation which resulted in various
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 issues like Asthma. Moving
further
, increasing
population
also
 leads to the lack of
resouses
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resources
 on earth
such
 as
water
, coal,
natural
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and natural
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 gas. To explain, more and more societies are developing , more they need natural
resources
 to survive.
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, nowadays
water
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 level is dipping down since
large
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 quantity of
water
 is used by enhancing
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 of people. In a recent survey, in 2022, it was claimed that 80% of the natural
resources
 are being totally vanished and there is remaining 20% of the natural gas,
water
 and coal for
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future generation.
Therefore
, it can be said that if the present communities are facing
problem
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the problem
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 of
lack
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 of
water
resources
then
 the upcoming communities would totally
lost
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the
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 natural
resources
.
To conclude
,
government
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 should take
srerious
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serious
 steps to tackle
this
 issue. There must be
a
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compulsary
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compulsory
 public education regarding family planning methods and
its
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 benefits. So that there could be a limit on
excalation
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escalation
 of development in
population
.
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