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Many governments have laws that ban the sale and use of hard drugs such as heroin and cocaine, yet they allow people to buy drugs such as tobacco and alcohol. Laws that prohibit the sale and use of hard drugs should be applied to all drugs, including tobacco and alcohol. What is your opinion? Give examples or yor personal experiance  write at lease 250 words

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Nowadays Narcotics are a huge threat to our society and the consumer index is extremely growing up day by day.
Therefore
, authorities have strict
laws
 all over the world and it is illegal to trade or consumed.
However
,except the Muslim ,countries there is no specific law applied to sell or use liquor and
tobacco
products
.in
this
 essay,I will argue that strict
laws
 must implement for all kinds of
drugs
 including alcohol and
tobacco
.
Firstly
,Why
governments
 are not placing any
laws
 against consuming these low-grade
drugs
 ?the answer is most
governments
 have huge tax gains from these
products
such
 as
tobacco
 and alcohol.
For example
, a survey conducted by a famous magazine it is shown that in recent years the tax gains against these
products
 have increased by more than 90 per cent,but the consumption rate has doubled and most school kids are addicted to
tobacco
.
On the other hand
,The health care system is collapsing in most third-world countries.Since
governments
 have to spend a large number of funds to maintain the cancer patients and their very expensive medication they do not have enough funds to maintain other facilities.
For instance
, if
governments
 impose
laws
 and regulation to ban all kind of
drugs
 and alcoholic beverage which is extremely bad for the human body will create a peaceful and healthy new generation in years to come. In conclusion,We should not have categorized drug types and in my opinion,
governments
 should ban all kinds of
drugs
 including
tobacco
 to maintain a healthy community.
Moreover
,
this
 will make a big impact on families since they spend a lot of money on alcohol and
tobacco
.
in addition
 , I believe that the money they may use for their children's education if
governments
 ban those
products
.
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