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Every year large numbers of people migrate from one country to another for different reasons. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of migration for the individual and for society as a whole give relevent example on your own

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Nowadays an increasing number of
people
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 are leaving their home
country
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 and moving to other
countries
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 for various reasons but the majority of the
people
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 are moving to find a better life for themselves and
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 their loved ones.
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,there is a negative and positive
impact
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 on
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 trend. In
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 essay, I will argue that migrating between
countries
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 will have a positive effect on individuals but it will create a negative impact on our society.
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, most of the
people
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 from third-world
countries
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 have a trend to move to develop Western
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 since their wages and benefits are not meeting depend on their workload since most of the developed nations have a wide variety of facilities are offering for professional individuals
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 as permanent residanceship
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 citizenship.
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this
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 reason, many professionals from poor
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 are moving to the Western world to find a better career and lifestyle.
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, a survey conducted by a famous news channel it is shown that the majority of Asians are moving to Western
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 and
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, the whole community will affect very badly the poor
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 since they have very minimum professionals specifically in the health care industry and
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 trend is giving more pressure to the governments
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 a large number of doctors are migrating to another
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.
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,
people
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 who are moving to another
country
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 are getting various kinds of facilities
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 they are able to improve their language abilities.
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,most parents' first priority nowadays is a better future and education for their kids since some of the
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's education systems are collapsing and governments are not funding as per requirements.
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, Indian nations mostly migrate and
people
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 from India hold major positions in the Western world
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 as business and political world. In conclusion, migrating will have a very negative impact on the whole society but the individual may experience a wide variety of facilities and benefits they can never imagine.
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