A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter - describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team - summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts - say how you think the company should spend the money Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam My name is Daniel Kong, and I am from the general public. I'm writing

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letter to appreciate your company can spend a large amount of money to sponsor our teenager's sports for the next two years or pay for concerts.

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will be an excellent platform for children to improve their sports talent.

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, they can learn how to work with their teammate and enhance body health, which is essential.

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, there have a lot of benefits to

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for the concerts. People who can show the public their distinctive.

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, it can reduce some pressure from work when people enjoy the concerts. From my point of view. The company can sponsor children for one year.

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, the rest of the money can pay for one concert. I believe it is bests for both opinions. All the best Daniel Kong

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 8.0

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