A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter - describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team - summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts - say how you think the company should spend the money Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam My name is Daniel Kong, and I am from the general public. I'm writing

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letter to appreciate your company can spend a large amount of money to sponsor our teenager's sports for the next two years or pay for concerts.

Firstly

this

will be an excellent platform for children to improve their sports talent.

Also

, they can learn how to work with their teammate and enhance body health, which is essential.

Secondly

, there have a lot of benefits to

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for the concerts. People who can show the public their distinctive.

For example

, sing-song and dance.

Also

, it can reduce some pressure from work when people enjoy the concerts. From my point of view. The company can sponsor children for one year.

Furthermore

, the rest of the money can pay for one concert. I believe it is bests for both opinions. All the best Daniel Kong

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Lexical resource: 8.0

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