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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

#people #choices
Living is a dynamic cycle-process as part of
human
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being
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. Because of that, there are several options that come across
to
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our life because life is always changing.These days, some
people
 assume that we have many options for ourselves. I do partly agree with
this
 perspective and will give and explain the following reasons. The Internet and social media spread
the
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information
 through our social life.
As a consequence
,
people
 are getting to know more about the conditions that are happening and expectations from their society.
Thus
,
people
 tend to compare their condition with others either their choices
such
 as
university
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 or choose their career path.
For instance
,
people
 absorb
information
that is
 not fit for them and make them indecisive because they are frightened that their choices were not as good as they expect Apart from that,
information
 about something has emerged a long time ago but the platforms are getting familiar recently. So, in my point of view ,
people
 are getting lots of
information
 because of the media, not because of the era.
For example
, statistics show that the number of topics that
people
 used in the search engine stated that
people
 use the normative condition as a filter before they are making a choice. In conclusion, I partly agree with
this
 point, since there is a huge amount of improvement in the digital world that does not align with
people
 when they want to make an option because the initial process before
people
 are making a choice has happened
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 a long time ago.
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  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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