The chart below shows what anthroplogy graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in the work after five years.

The chart below shows what anthroplogy graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in the work after five years.
The pie chart depicts what anthropology students who graduated from one university did after they finished their undergraduate degree course. The table
illustrate
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the income of the
anthropologists
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workers after five years of working. It is clear from the graph that the majority have a full-time job.
According to
what is shown, in the pie chart, around half of the proportion do full-time work. Followed by
part-time
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job
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which
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represented a small minority (15%).
Full time
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and postgrad study accounted for 8% which is the same ratio
of
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not
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known section. The rest of the percentage flow between 5-12 per cent.
On the other hand
,
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the table chart,
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explains how
they
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earn after five years of work. Freelance consultants and
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sector represented the same pattern. Both of them had 5% and 15% in 25-50 thousand and 50-75 thousand respectively. Most employers in private companies had 50-75 thousand dollars as a wage.
To sum up
, we could say that freelance consultants and
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sector approximately had similar behaviours.
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  • undergraduate degree
  • anthropology graduates
  • career paths
  • further education
  • full-time employment
  • part-time work
  • self-employment
  • postgraduate studies
  • salary progression
  • salary growth
  • government sector
  • private sector
  • non-profit organizations
  • demand for anthropologists
  • sector-specific skills
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