The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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illustrates
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how many
tourists
travelled to a particular
Carribean
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Caribbean
island
over a
period
of 7 years from 2010 to 2017. Units are measured in
millions
of
visitors
.
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that the total number of tourist
travelled
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to a
Carribean
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Caribbean
island
increased consistently in every recorded time
period
.
Moreover
,
while
the
volume
of
tourists
staying on
island
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the island
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the
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highest at the start, it had been overtaken by the number of
visitors
staying on
cruise
ships
by the end of the
period
. The total of
visitors
travelled
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to a
carribean
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Caribbean
island
stood at exactly 1
millions
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visitors
in 2010, with the
volume
of
visitors
staying on
island
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the island
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stood
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at about 0.75
millions
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and for those who choose
staying
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on
cruise
ships
stood at about 0.25
millions
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million
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.
Then
, the
volume
of
visitors
staying on
island
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rose slightly to 1.25
millions
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million
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,
while
the number of
visitors
staying on
cruise
ships
experienced a slight decline
to
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original
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the original
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level in 2012. In the following 5 years, the
volume
of
tourists
staying on
cruise
ships
rose dramatically and peaked at 2
millions
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by the end of the
period
.
On the other hand
, the
volume
of
tourists
staying on
island
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the island
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experienced a slight increase and has a small dip in 2016 before
reached
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a peak of around 1.5
millions
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in 2017.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, island, period, millions, visitors, volume, cruise, ships with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.

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