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The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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illustrates
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 how many
tourists
 travelled to a particular
Carribean
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Caribbean
island
 over a
period
 of 7 years from 2010 to 2017. Units are measured in
millions
 of
visitors
.
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that the total number of tourist
travelled
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 to a
Carribean
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Caribbean
island
 increased consistently in every recorded time
period
.
Moreover
,
while
 the
volume
 of
tourists
 staying on
island
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the island
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the
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 highest at the start, it had been overtaken by the number of
visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
 by the end of the
period
. The total of
visitors
travelled
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 to a
carribean
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Caribbean
island
 stood at exactly 1
millions
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million
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visitors
 in 2010, with the
volume
 of
visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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stood
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 at about 0.75
millions
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million
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 and for those who choose
staying
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 on
cruise
ships
 stood at about 0.25
millions
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million
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.
Then
, the
volume
 of
visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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 rose slightly to 1.25
millions
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million
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,
while
 the number of
visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
 experienced a slight decline
to
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original
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the original
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 level in 2012. In the following 5 years, the
volume
 of
tourists
 staying on
cruise
ships
 rose dramatically and peaked at 2
millions
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million
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 by the end of the
period
.
On the other hand
, the
volume
 of
tourists
 staying on
island
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the island
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 experienced a slight increase and has a small dip in 2016 before
reached
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 a peak of around 1.5
millions
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million
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 in 2017.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, island, period, millions, visitors, volume, cruise, ships with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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