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The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie diagrams present data on the composition of
energy
 production in a certain country in two distinct periods, 1983 and 2003.
Overall
, oil constituted the largest proportion of
energy
 produced in the nation in
both
 years,
while
 the proportional share of coal and natural
gas
 experienced a significant change. In
both
 years, 1983 and 2003, oil was the dominant
energy
 source, making up about 40% of total production, followed by coal at 23% in 1983 and nuclear power at 24% in 2003.
However
, the drop
of
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 oil dominance and the rise in nuclear power are noticeable, as oil’s contribution
in
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energy
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 sector reduced from 42% in 1983 to 38% in 2003, and the share of nuclear power rose from 20% in 1983 to 24% in 2003.
However
, by 2003, the scenario had shifted dramatically for
both
 coal and natural
gas
. The percentage of coal
energy
 was 23
percent
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 in 1983, which remarkably dropped to 13% in 2003,
while
 the share of natural
gas
 in the nation’s
energy
 contribution considerably increased from 11% in 1983 to 21% in 2003, depicting the nation’s obvious move from coal towards natural
gas
 for its
energy
 composition.
However
, the contribution of Hydropower
in
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 the nation’s
energy
 generation remained the same (4%) in
both
 periods.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, both, gas with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • energy sources
  • increases
  • decreases
  • trends
  • analysis
  • significant
  • compare
  • changes over time
  • introduction
  • phase out
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