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What are the advantages and disadvantages of travelling by bicycle?

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Ancient people discovered the
bike
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 and since it became one of the most common items on the surface of Earth. The following essay will specify the benefits and disadvantages of a
bicycle
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 and cycling. On the one hand, there are certain numbers of advantages of travelling by wheel.
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, cycling is one of the sports and it means that riding a
bike
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 is beneficial for the body.
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, the
bicycle
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 is a paramount part of a healthy lifestyle, because it pumps our whole body and keeps us healthy. Another benefit of cycling is its function, to be exact a transportation. It is much better to choose transport like the wheel, which doesn't require petroleum, than too expensive cars.
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 , riding a
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 has some drawbacks because of its risks.
It is clear that
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 travelling by
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also
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 is not easy and inaccurate riding might lead to profound injuries.
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, a bad
bike
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 fit can cause pain in several areas of your body and the most affected areas are
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your neck
, Shoulders, Lower back and Wrists.
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due to
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 the lack of sufficient roads, which are specialized and intended for cycling,
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bike
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the bike
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 is dangerous
for riding
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to ride
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. It can be proved by the number of traffic accidents because of wheels. In conclusion,
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 there are
the
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disadvantages
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 as injury and road hazards , I believe that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks of travelling by
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 .

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Task Response
Task Response: The essay addresses the advantages and disadvantages of travelling by bicycle, but the response is incomplete and lacks development. Make sure to fully cover the task by providing a balanced discussion of both the advantages and disadvantages.
Coherence and Cohesion
Coherence and Cohesion: The essay has a basic logical structure, but the introduction and conclusion need improvement. Additionally, the use of transitions to connect ideas and examples is limited. Work on creating a more cohesive and logically connected essay with a well-developed introduction and conclusion.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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