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Some people believe that the problem of illegal drugs can be solved by legalizing all drugs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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Addiction to
drugs
 has been afflicting
society
 for a long time. Many people consider legalizing
drugs
 as the only way to overcome
this
 problem. I partially agree with
this
 proposal. It is a complex issue and it has many advantages and disadvantages. The legalization of
drugs
 would surely have many beneficial consequences in our
society
. Huge sums of
money
 are now filling the pockets of criminal organizations, recycling
this
money
 in shameful businesses. Allowing the sale of these substances, governments would gain huge quantities of
money
 that could have many profitable uses. Not only
this
money
 could implement health and reduce taxes, but it could
also
 be used to create buildings where addicts could take
drugs
 in a controlled environment.
Such
 an infrastructure has already been tried in Germany. Here,
also
 thanks to the help of psychologists, many junkies have been reintroduced to
society
. Regardless of the great outcomes that might arrive from the legalization of
drugs
, there are many downturns to it. In the current
society
, is not that easy to find pure
drugs
, and usually, they come at high prices, making it hard to afford for many people who are broke and want to lighten their pain getting high. Making these molecules legal would allow a vast number of people to easily find and utilize them when they feel blue. Amsterdam has become quite a clear example of
this
 effect. It became a gathering place for individuals who want to do
drugs
 in a legal and controlled manner. Making tourists travel from all around the world in order to try
this
 new experience. In conclusion, personally, I do not believe that the use of illegal
drugs
 will be solved by legalizing them. But the need to control and help junkies will.
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