The chart shows Australian home Internet use by reasons and age groups. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows Australian home Internet use by reasons and age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given charts depict Internet usage at home for several proposes between different
groups
of
age
. In general, most people access the Internet to send emails in all
age
groups
,
while
these figures for the others have a nearly similar pattern. Looking at the first chart for more detail, the percentage of Internet users to send and receive emails are almost 100%. In comparison to these statistics
for
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people who use social networking and
pay
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receipts, account for around two-thirds of the total users. In the second series of charts, it witnessed about 90% of the young from 15 to 24 years old who utilise social media, and these figures decrease through by older
age
groups
.
Furthermore
,
while
the youngest
age
group has online payment at the least proportion (about 40%), the 25-34
age
group who pay through online methods has the highest figure at 70%.
Finally
, emailing is a comparable figure at around 80% in all
age
groups
.
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