The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the

proportion

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of 65 aged and

over population

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in three countries between 1940 and 2040.

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, it can be seen that the old populations of the three nations will increase in 2040 with elderly Japanese information will be the highest

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. In 1940, the

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of the old population in the USA was about 8% and gradually increased to 15% in 1980.

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, the figure slightly dropped to approximately 13% in 2020 and will sharply

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to around 23% in 2040. The elderly citizens of Sweden started at around 7% in 1940 and sharply rose to approximately 14% in 1980. In 1990 the figure slightly decreased and in

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significantly increased to 20% in around 2010.

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, it slightly dropped to 19% in 2020 and will still decrease to 17% in 2025 and sharply

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to 25% in 2040. Turning to 65 aged and over in Japan's population, the figure started from 5% in 1940 and

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slowly decreased to about 3% in 1960 and remain the same in 1980.

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, it increases to almost 5% in 2020 and still sharply

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. After 2020, the graph will dramatically

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over and reach about 28% in 2040 which will be the highest

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when compared to the other 2 countries.

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