The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003.

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The pie charts show changes in the percentages of different sources of energy generated in a country from 1983 to 2003.

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, it is observed that in both years, oil was the major source of energy and hydropower the least.

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, Oil recorded the highest proportion in 1983 with a figure of 43% but declined by 7% to 38 in 2003. There was a 4 per cent rise in Nuclear power which was 20% in 1983 to 24% in 2003. A similar trend was noticed in coal which had a significant increase of 10% from 11 to 21% by 2003. It was

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some did exceedingly well, there was neither a reduction nor addition in hydropower as it remained at 4% from 1983 to 2004 making it the least source of energy , there was a significant drop in coal from 23 per cent to 13 per cent in 2003.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

154 words

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The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003.

Some people get into debt by buying things they don’t need and cannot afford. What are the reasons for this behaviour? What actions can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

Some people believe that young people who commit serious crimes should be punished in the same way as adults . Do you agree or disagree?

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