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Computers are being used more n education nowadays than in the past Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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Most educational institutional institutions use
computers
 in the classroom and many rely on online platforms to deliver their courses and communicate with staff and
students
 off campus too.
This
 essay will discuss what I consider to be the main advantages and potential drawbacks of
computers
 in education. There are several key benefits stemming from the use of electronic devices in an educational context. The main one is the greater access it allows.
Whereas
 in the past
students
 had to physically attend lectures and tutorials, these days everything can be done remotely and even asynchronously.
This
 means that education is more available and flexible than ever. Another key advantage
computers
allows
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 teachers
o
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to
 better meet
learners
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learners'
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 needs. As content can be delivered using video, audio and even virtual reality nowadays,
not to mention
students
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 access to remedial and extension activities online, engagement and success rates are demonstrably higher. There are,
however
, some drawbacks associated with the increasing reliance on
computers
. A decrease in face-to-face interaction is one of them. With more and more people studying remotely, there are fewer opportunities for interaction between
students
 and their peers or teachers, which can be problematic for young people
in particular
.
In addition
 to
this
 social concern, there is the issue of cheating and plagiarism. Since most university work, including assessment, is now done without supervision, it is not difficult for
students
pay
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 others to write in their place, and it can be difficult to detect.
Such
 actions can undermine the integrity of the qualification and the institution. In conclusion,
this
 essay discussed the impact of
computers
 on education.
It is clear that
, despite the possible problems, there are great advantages to incorporating them into learning.
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