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Go to college or take a year gap is a controversial topic, what is your opinion?

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Nowadays parents are concerned about whether they should let their kids who are going to college
work
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 or travel during the summer vacation. My view is that both of these two options have their advantages
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 disadvantages.
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it is obvious that there are lots of benefits for kids to blend
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 society if they go to earn experience early. Compared with
students
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 who have never
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in
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 society themselves, they can learn many new things that won’t be taught in school, so they will adapt to the
workplaces
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workplace
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 faster after
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graduation
of
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 college.
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, finding a job would be a good choice.Especially for
students
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 whose family can't afford their entire study fee,
they
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can share the economic burden by going to
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 during their vacations.
Students
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 who
dont
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don't
 have to share the economic burden can
also
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 widen their knowledge
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 money and society, which means that when they go to college they will treasure more their
optunity
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opportunity
 to
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. But
on the other hand
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,
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 not all benefits to
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 a gap year. if
students
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 use most of their vacation time on these activities, they will have no time to review their high school knowledge.
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 to
this
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, they may even
obsessed
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be obsessed
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on
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 all kinds of
temptation
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instead
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 of
study
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.
Therefore
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, it is not fit for every student to take a gap year.
To sum up
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, whether the
students
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 choose to take the gap year or directly attend the university is dependent on the
students
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 themselves. In my opinion, if they have the potential and the courage to
work
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 or travel around, it would have more benefits than just doing nothing.

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