Do you think businesses should hire employees who will spend their entire lives working for the company? Explain why you agree or disagree. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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There are many discussions
to
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buissnesses
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businesses
should hire and deal with employees, some are saying that
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company
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companies
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should look for those who dedicate their
life
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to it, meaning working in the same business
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their entire
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life but I would
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disagree
with that. In
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I will look
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reasons for both opinions and explain my own. The most common argument for keeping
employee
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employees
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in the
company
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is that it can be hard to find an experienced candidate. and
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company
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the company
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ofter
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often
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has to spend
time
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and
resourses
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resources
on
education
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and
preparetion
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preparation
of new people. And when you have a person who
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been working for 5 or 10
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and knows all in and outs of your
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business
he or she will outperform any newcomers.
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one of the essential
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of human culture is sharing
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ideas
and experiences to improve and develop new ones, so in my opinion
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recruiting
a new face to the
company
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may bring more benefits in
long
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the long
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term
due to
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possibilities
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and changes that it leads to.
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Moreover
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the
buiseness
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business
itself is not set
in
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a rock, it is changing with
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the market
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and
time
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therefore
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its
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it is
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crutial
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crucial
critical
to explore and adapt even when it can be costy. A person that has
spend
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half of his life dealing with the same problems might be afraid to try new
aproach
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approach
approaches
or look on from
a
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another angle.
To sum up
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, there are some benefits of
hireing
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hiring
an
employe
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employee
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who spends
entire
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their entire
his entire
her entire
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lives
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life
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working for the
company
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, but I think having a more natural flow of people gives more
advantujes
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advantages
adventures
. The business always
have
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to look for
improvments
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improvements
and
emplayes
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employees
employee
employers
who
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too much
time
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in one place can feel traped and
uneble
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unable
to grow, so
hiering
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hiring
a new one even for a short amount of
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may give
this
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fresh air to the
company
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. As you cannot pour from an empty cap, having someone with
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different views because of their experiences might bring unexpected but
benefitial
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beneficial
development.

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Make sure to use proper punctuation to improve the readability of your essay.
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While you provide points for both sides, try to focus more on supporting your own opinion with detailed examples and explanations.
content
You present a balanced view by discussing both perspectives on the topic, which demonstrates critical thinking.
structure
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main argument, which is important for task completion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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