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Some People believe that it is the responsibility of the individuals to take care of their own health.Others believe that government should make sure that their citizen are healthy. discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #responsibility #individuals #care #health #government #citizen
In today's world, the advancement in science and technology
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 has led to the development
in
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 medical treatments. Health is a fundamental aspect of
one
's life,
however
, often ignored by many individuals. Some believe that
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 of a person depends on his personal choices,
whereas
, others argue that governments should ensure healthier lifestyles
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public
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. I advocate
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the fact that ruling authorities can help in building a disease-free country.
This
 essay will discuss both views. To commence with, self-care and maintaining
one
's medical fitness is a vital
part
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 of
one
's personality.
However
,
this
 ideology suffers at the hands of our busy routines and late working hours.
For instance
, people indulge in drug abuse and smoking, partly
due to
 the
stessors
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stressors
 in their lives, knowing their
hazardours
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hazardous
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.
Moreover
, some do binge-eating during stressful times and
it
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 leads to obesity and worsens their heart. Some illnesses are a product of
one
's personal decisions that makes
one
's life miserable.
In contrast
,
government
 plays a major role in raising a
healtheir
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healthy
 community.
A
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reasearch
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research
 shows that
life
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 expectancy of humans has plunged to 60 years in the past few years. A main contributing factor
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increasing
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death
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 rate
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lack
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 of
government's
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 concern towards
public
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the public
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. Organisations receive taxes and they should provide free
health-care
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 services to individuals. Reforms should be made to improve
well-being
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 of people.
For example
, vaccination programs and breast cancer screening, all over the world
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 contributed
in
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reduction
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 of infections and cancer among individuals.
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Similarly
, smoking should be banned to prevent lung cancer and other
health-realted
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health-related
 problems caused by smoking. I believe that
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government
 of the country can improve
population's
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 health by spending more time and money
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 making accurate laws and
introducting
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introducing
 screening programs. These steps can result in
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 of certain diseases causing earlier deaths.
To conclude
, physical fitness is partly a responsibility of the person himself, but more importantly, it is
government's
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 leadership that helps in
controling
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controlling
 and preventing certain diseases. It should ensure regular check-ups and strict laws to deal with disabilities.
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