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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast-food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast-food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
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The following chart illustrates the percentage of the frequency of eating fast food in the USA from 2003 to 2013.
Overall
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, the maximum percentage of eating fast food is once a
week
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 and once or twice a
month
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 in these three years (2003, 2006, and 2013).
In addition
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, the frequency of eating has 6 different
times
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 (every day, several
times
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 a
week
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, once a
week
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, once or twice a
month
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, a few
times
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 a
year
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, and never).
To begin
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 with, in 2003, the percentage of eating fast food increased from 4% to 31% which includes several
times
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 a
week
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, once a
week
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, and once or twice a
month
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.
However
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, it reduced from 31% to 5% which includes a few
times
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 a
year
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 and never. In 2006, it sharply increased from 3% to 32% which includes every day, several
times
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 a
week
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, and once a
week
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. But it significantly reduced from 30% to 5% which includes once or twice a
month
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, a few
times
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 a
year
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, and never. In 2013, it sharply increased from 3% to 32% which includes every day, several
times
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 a
week
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, once a
week
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, and once or twice a
month
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.
However
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, it significantly reduced from 15% to 4% which includes a few
times
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 a
year
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 and never.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words week, month, times, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast-food consumption
  • frequently
  • economic downturn
  • age demographics
  • lifestyles
  • health consciousness
  • advertising campaigns
  • affordable dining
  • healthier alternatives
  • consumer habits
  • proliferation
  • trend analysis
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