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Fast food industry is having negative effects on our health?Do you agree or disagree?

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now day fast
food
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 become very famous and most children and the younger generation prefer to eat it, even thou it's unhealthy ,which is not deniable, here are some factors,going through. In
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 modern era every one busy with their work, sometimes they may not get enough time to cook for themselves, in
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 conditions may opt for fast
food
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 which can be prepared very quickly , it is tasty as well ,
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 prefer to eat Maggi,if
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 am exhausted by routine
food
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 ,what will be made at home daily,there are health issues occur,it is a most important thing to notice before eating it.
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 2 decades, many suffering from obesity, heart attack, diabetes, and especially in women,PCOD case is increased ,
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 unhealthy
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 habits like eating junk foods,if the government is involved in it ,minimising granting of licences for that kind of
food
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 courts, promoting healthy
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 and providing awareness of good nutrition from the primary school itself it gives more impact on the society,frequent advertisements about healthy nutrition.proper intake of proteins and minerals,vitamins
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 BMI, should be followed with dietician guidance, In ,conclusion fast and quickly available foods
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 are eating pizza and burgers are unhealthy,but sometimes lack of time in a busy schedule people will prefer to eat ,taking health into consideration ,we must avoid junk foods.

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