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Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given chart illustrates the
acid
level
 in the
mouth
 after eating sweets for 40
minutes
.
Overall
, it is true that the
acid
 levels in the
mouth
 after having every sweet food soared drastically within
five
minutes
.
Then
, they decreased by different speeds over the following period. By looking at a line graph closely, one can see that eating cane
sugar
 had the lowest
pH
 value in the
mouth
 of three
point
five
 at
five
minutes
, followed by fruit
sugar
. Both
acid
 levels decreased continuously from 10
minutes
 to 40
minutes
 after eating.
In addition
, since fruit
sugar
 showed a higher
pH
 value than cane
sugar
, it escaped the
acid
level
(
five
point
five
pH
) causing tooth decay earlier at 20
minutes
.
In contrast
, even though the
acid
level
 in the
mouth
 after consuming honey soared the least at four
point
 seven
pH
 after
five
minutes
, it remained the same between
five
 and 10
minutes
, not declined.
Thus
, the honey's
pH
 value(four
point
 seven
pH
) was lower than fruit
sugar
's(
five
pH
) at 10
minutes
. Even so, it surpassed the
acid
level
 making people's teeth decay at first at almost 15
minutes
.
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