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Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given chart illustrates the
acid
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level
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 in the
mouth
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 after eating sweets for 40
minutes
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.
Overall
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, it is true that the
acid
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 levels in the
mouth
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 after having every sweet food soared drastically within
five
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minutes
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.
Then
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, they decreased by different speeds over the following period. By looking at a line graph closely, one can see that eating cane
sugar
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 had the lowest
pH
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 value in the
mouth
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 of three
point
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five
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 at
five
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minutes
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, followed by fruit
sugar
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. Both
acid
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 levels decreased continuously from 10
minutes
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 to 40
minutes
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 after eating.
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, since fruit
sugar
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 showed a higher
pH
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 value than cane
sugar
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, it escaped the
acid
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level
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(
five
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point
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five
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pH
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) causing tooth decay earlier at 20
minutes
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.
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, even though the
acid
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level
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 in the
mouth
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 after consuming honey soared the least at four
point
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 seven
pH
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 after
five
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minutes
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, it remained the same between
five
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 and 10
minutes
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, not declined.
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, the honey's
pH
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 value(four
point
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 seven
pH
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) was lower than fruit
sugar
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's(
five
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pH
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) at 10
minutes
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. Even so, it surpassed the
acid
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level
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 making people's teeth decay at first at almost 15
minutes
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.
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