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People are more aware of fashion nowadays and it continues to be a huge business, with a lot of advertising involved and millions of dollars of being paid to models. Discuss whether this is a good or bad trend. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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It is undeniable that in the present day,
fashion
 has played a crucial role in our lives and there has been a huge investment in advertising campaigns through modelling. I truly believe that
while
this
 tendency has its own benefit, there is still a drawback that needs to be considered. On the one hand, advocates of
this
 trend base their ground on the fact that
fashion
 makes
people
 become more unique. To be specific, if an individual develops a personal
fashion
 style, she might be well-known. Considered Ms Khanh Linh,
also
 known by the nickname Ms Trendy, is an influencer on the internet. When talking about the
fashion
 industry in Vietnam,
people
 will always remember her for her own crazy and catchy style. To let
this
 happens, she has spent so much time finding not only her suitable style but
also
 her uniqueness.
On the other hand
, as we can see,
people
 will lack money if they are so obsessed with
fashion
.
For instance
, when a brand creates a series of new items,
people
 tend to collect them immediately, and they even try to buy all of them.
However
,
at the end
 of
this
 year,
this
 item might become untrendy because of the fact that there will be other new items at that time.
Therefore
, if a person wants to catch up with the rapid change in
fashion
, she
also
 needs to update frequently, leading to a waste of money. Taking everything into account, it is obvious that when
people
 pursue
fashion
, they will have more self-expression,
whereas
this
 trend will result in a lack of money.
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