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The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart represents the number of visits and the amount that
people
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 had to pay for 3 common entertainments: sport, theme parks and cinemas in 2009. The are differents types of tickets: the ticket for
one
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 person and the family ticket (4
people
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). Measures are illustrated in thousands and dollars for prices.
Overall
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, what's obvious is that the most visiting entertainment are cinemas as opposed to sports. Theme parks is situated between.
One
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 thing that can explain
this
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 is the price for a ticket at cinema which is considerably less expensive than for a football game. On the
one
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 hand, there are approximately 100 0000
people
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 that visited a cinema in 2009 which is significantly less for theme parks and sports because under 400 000 and 200 000
people
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 went to these kinds of activities.
On the other hand
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, events have not the same prices. To illustrate, a football game costs 75 dollars for
one
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 person when an access for the cinema is 15 dollars.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, one with synonyms.
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