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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case ? What can be done about this problem ?

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Food
 security aspects are the noticeable ones when it comes to discussing
food
 supply somewhere in the world. Because
food
 is the basic need for fulfilling our life as important as housing. Even,
agriculture
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 terms have become advanced today, there are some people who are still starving around the world. I will explain
about
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the factor
from
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this
 case and give the best solution to tackle
this
 problem. Agriculture is
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a modern-terms
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modern-terms
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 that focus on the maintenance of
food
 products as good as we can consume directly.
Otherwise
, there are some aspects that might affect
in
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storing the staple
food
 that
impact
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 the quality of the
food
.
As a consequence
, we are making proper
food
 that can save citizens during the crisis.
For instance
, making biscuits is
the
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 possible solution to figuring out these problems.
However
, it will be hard to maintain that condition
sustainable
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sustainably
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 if some nations were not ready with local resources that would be responsible for it for a long period. As it so, governments have to take into account these problems, not only for human resources but
also
 for making the
best storing
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food
.
For instance
, governments should deploy local citizens to make the local product which means it could take longer than they take outside human resources. All in all, these cases are multifactorial issues but the most noticeable one is
food
 chains because there are not enough storage systems.
As a result
, governments have to take charge
due to
 these problems to make it through either in technology or training the staff.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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