Some people believe that modern technology is encouraging sociable behaviour. Some other people think that it is making people less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Recently, there has been much interest in gaining a better understanding of the impact of

technology

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people

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's behaviours. Some

people

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are of the

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that newer technologies have improved many

people

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's lives, particularly the lives of

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who are socially anxious.

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, I agree with those who claim that

technology

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impedes

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's social skills. In

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essay, I will provide the rationale for both viewpoints

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proffer justification for my own

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. Recent technological advancements,

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those who espouse the former

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, can remove the social pressure of face-to-face communication. Online forums and other social

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provide a secure environment to interact with other

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as users are not directly exposed to each other.

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, they can be particularly useful for shy

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. Maybe there is some truth to

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claim, and some evidence can be offered to support it. My high school classmate, Laura, is a shining example of

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. Laura was an extremely introverted person during high school and was having difficulty developing relationships with other teenagers. She started to use Facebook on a daily basis and, before she knew it, became very good at initiating and maintaining online and face-to-face friendships. Laura's case,

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interesting, is very unique and cannot be taken as a representation of the whole population. I firmly believe that oftentimes far more harm than good is done by the use of modern

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. Online communication, for one thing, can make

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less considerate of other

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people'

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feelings. Needless to say, when users are hidden behind the privacy of their own

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, decency can easily go out of the window. I am

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alone in

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view.

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recent study published in a peer-reviewed journal

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found that online communication users tend to use twice as many inappropriate words,

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such as

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"stupid", "jerk", etc., compared to

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who engage

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face-to-face interactions.

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although

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the positive impact of

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on some

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's social skills cannot be ignored, I hold to the

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that it does little good to enhance the social behaviours of the majority of us.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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