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In many part of the world, it is common for one parent to stay at home and raise a newborn child while the other works full-time to earn money. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is true that in most
of
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countries
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which
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in the world , it is popular what only
mother
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 or father to stay at home and bring up their
children
while
 another parent works full-time to earn
money
 , and
thought
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though
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this
 is mostly beneficial , there are
also
 some negative aspects that will
also
 be considered .    Beginning with the positive points .
One
the
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 first benefits of
such
 a measure
is
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 that if
one
parents
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parent
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 work and the other
bring
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brings
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 up their newborn child, they do not face to not enough
money
 for living .
This
 would mean that poor families will be less in
country
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the country
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which
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 they are living . Another benefit would be that
parents
 supply with necessary things to
child
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the child
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 . There is
also
 concern that when
children
 ought to buy a new book , their
parents
 can give enough
money
 to their
children
  without challenge .     
Nevertheless
, there are drawbacks to
such
 a solution . First and foremost , Both
of
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parents
 should
pattention
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attention
 to their
children
while
 they are growing up.  It is often the case that
children
 need both of their
kind
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.
For example
 ,  Most
of
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youngs
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young
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 should hear
father's
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their father's
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 advice . Because
they
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arethey
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 afraid of their fathers . Added to that most
of
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fathers
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the fathers
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 work full-time and mothers raise their
children
 in my country .
As a result
,  a lot of boys do not do mother's advice .
That is
 why a few boys join some bad groups and begin bad habits .
For example
,  my two classmates begin smoking without
parents'
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their parents'
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careful
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.         By way of conclusion ,
this
 essay considers the benefits and drawbacks of
such
 a measure .
That is
 in
many
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any
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part
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parts
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 of the world , it is
famous
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a famous
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 habit which
one
 parent
bring
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to bring
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 up their newborn baby
while
 another
one
earn
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earns
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money
.
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