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Consumers are faced with an increasing number of advertising by competing companies To what extent do you think consumers are affected ? What measurements can be taken to tackle the problem?

Nowadays, most businesses increase the amount of advertisements,
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 these advertisements
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 to confusion and misunderstanding of drugs among individuals. These issues could be solved by adding warnings and more accurate material about
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 product. Too much advertising has many consequences, the main one being confusion. When people are faced with too many ads, they reserve too much material,
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, it would be harder to distinguish between similar products,features and brands. If every commercial presents things as the best ,consumers may feel overwhelmed and unable to choose.
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, ads about pill of headache there are plenty of them
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, users can be confused.
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, it can lead to buying unnecessary items. When individuals are surrounded by a lot of items,they buy these things without even thinking because they are victims of a marketing strategy.
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 these reasons, consumers are affected by the increasing number of commercials .
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 there are several effects on humans, these problems can be solved by companies,since they can add more warnings and clearer intelligence. When companies provide key product characteristics in the label of it.
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, medicine containers indicate the active substance, dosage, contraindications, and side effects.
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, governments must regulate the number of ads that are shown every day to the audience.
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, adding clearer data and limiting it can help to overcome
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 issue. In conclusion, raising the amount of commercials can bring some drawbacks to people, which can be solved by companies with more data , more warning
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 about the item and by restricting them.

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organization
Plan your ideas before you write. Use two or three clear points for both parts of the task.
structure
Write a short intro that states the problem and your view, and a conclusion that sums up.
coherence
Use topic sentences at the start of each paragraph to show what the paragraph will explain.
coherence
Link your ideas with simple connect words like 'also', 'but', 'however', 'for example'.
lexical
Be precise when you name things. For example, 'drug ads' not 'ads about pills' and 'warnings on labels' not 'more data'.
task response
Give clear examples that support your point, such as how ads can push people to buy items they do not need.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling; use simple sentences that are easy to read.
content
The essay shows the issue of ads and health products and gives a plan for action.
structure
There is a sense of purpose and a final conclusion.
examples
Some real life examples, like labels on medicine, are used.

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