Consumers are faced with an increasing number of advertising by competing companies To what extent do you think consumers are affected ? What measurements can be taken to tackle the problem?
In current times, a great deal of advertisements
which was
appeared by Verb problem
that
businesses'
contesting , led citizens to encounter Change noun form
businesses
with
them. Change preposition
apply
Although
these category
of adverts are advantageous for industrial improvement, Fix the agreement mistake
categories
it
would impact Correct pronoun usage
they
people
detrimental
.
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detrimentally
Step by step
marketing management is spreading and Add a hyphen
Step-by-step
in
Change preposition
as
result
of Add an article
the result
a result
this
,individuals are adopting
. Obviously, the Correct pronoun usage
adopting it
affect
of Replace the word
effect
this
has
already known. Verb problem
is
Consequently
, advertisements have been setting
many times , even in some circumstances they will interrupt Wrong verb form
set
people
as the reason of sequence. Apart from
this
, if there are some discounts for any products , they will purchase it
, even though they don't have to buy Correct pronoun usage
them
this
item and actually this
thing will not be necessary in their lives . For instance
, even children are affected by advertisements and with reference to parents, kids have been more obstinacy than previous
decades. Change preposition
in previous
Thus
, a considerable amount of offers was consulted
to the government about advertising.
As Verb problem
made
One
of the main Fix capitalization
one
issue
, advertising should have been controlled, Fix the agreement mistake
issues
nevertheless
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nevertheless,
marketologists
say that it had already got out of hand. Correct your spelling
bracketologists
However
, in some cases
advertising ought to be shrunk, in terms of length. Specifically, the responsible individuals have to manage it in an adequate way. Especially, in social media, Add a comma
cases,
people
will encounter with
adverts per minute, so Change preposition
apply
that
there Correct word choice
apply
are
only one method which could assist us to overcome Change the verb form
is
from
it is restriction. Namely, some limitations on advertising will be beneficial for Change preposition
apply
people
. The chairman of the internet should restrict it , afterwards to advertise companies should do payment for it ,
since it is free to advertise their manufactures
In conclusion, for Remove the comma
apply
this
problem not only can the government aid , but also
businesses will help with involving products
quality, not their status in the world's competition.Change the noun form
product
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