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It is believed that secondary school children should study international news as one of their school subjects. Others think that this is a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People's opinions differ as to whether or not international
news
 should be a part of educational programs.
While
 there are some arguments against
this
subject
, I affirm that international sources of information should be studied at
school
. There are several reasons why people do not support the idea of studying international
news
 by teenagers.
Firstly
, children have a lot of fundamental subjects
such
 as mathematics or literature to focus on. At the same time, international
news
 is not as important as science,
therefore
, it is not useful to implement
this
 new
subject
 in
school
 programs.
For example
, countries
such
 as Russia have extremely strong schools with a focus on natural science and Russian pupils would not cope with all the subjects.
Moreover
, modern children are really overloaded with different
school
 activities and they need to have time to kill. There were some cases when kids were exhausted by
school
 programs.
Hence
, an extra
subject
,
such
 as journalism is not a good idea. In spite of the above arguments, I support the view that international
news
 would be really useful for teens. Journalism develops critical thinking skills and helps to socialize.
Students
, who study international
news
 are rather communicative than others. American and European
students
 became more culture vultures after the implementation of
this
subject
 in the
school
 program.
Furthermore
, international
news
 would help
students
 to become more intelligent. European schools combine science and arts to educate fully developed
students
.
To sum up
, international
news
 would be a really useful
subject
 for
students
 and would help them to improve their soft skills.
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