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Pressure on the school and university students is increasing and students are pushed too hard work when they are young. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

#pressure #school #university #students #work #development
Nowadays, the pressure
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students
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school
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 and universities
handling
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is
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 extremely high and
it
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is increasing, and young
students
 should bear very hard work in their youth. I think it may lead to both positive
as well as
 negative consequences.
Firstly
,
students
 studying at schools or universities work very hard in order to grab knowledge regarding
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their future careers, which is the main determinant of their future success. In the nowadays’ world, it is almost insurmountable to have a
well paid
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 job without
well
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qualification
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, so
students
 are working hard for their own future.
Besides
,
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 employees work for big companies or businesses, which contribute to the economy and the tax system of
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, so everyone would be better off. From
this
 view, making
students
 study hard is essential, as well qualified workforce benefits the whole
society
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. There are some negative sides as well.
For instance
, a little boy studying hard in school or a young student cramming for a university exam
,
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 may feel under pressure and can be heavily depressed. They are
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their
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 young age when it is time to chill out and have some fun with their peers and family members.
However
,
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study
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 can deprive them
from
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 these luxuries, and have
negative
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 effect on their mental
behavior
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. In conclusion, I believe that studying hard for youngsters represents positive outcomes as it does some negatives.
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  • job market
  • technological advancements
  • government policies
  • stress
  • workforce
  • work ethic
  • time-management skills
  • mental health
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  • extracurricular activities
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