nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor
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time
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times
with
suffering Change preposition
apply
health
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detrimental
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a detrimental
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on their
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hospital
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the hospital
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doctors
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drugs
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for
consumers.
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to
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to produce
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