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For success in a future job the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.

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Some
people
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 believe that for being successful in a
career
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one
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 should relate well to
people
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,
while
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 others claim that for being a successful worker
one
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 should study hard at educational institutes. I personally believe that relating well to
people
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 is the best choice for being a successful worker. I feel
this
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way
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 for a number of reasons, which I am going to explore in the following essay. First and foremost, if you relate well to
people
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 it will not be difficult to
work
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 with //enhance your knowledge//
people
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. At
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work
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 we mostly
work
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 with
people
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. If we have no ability to talk with
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people
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 in a kind
way
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,
this
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 will cause serious problems for us in the future. The ability relating
people
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 helps you to talk with
people
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 at
work
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 and
this
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 is a good nature of a worker. No
one
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 will try to know what is
your
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inside, the only
way
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 to let them know is to speak with them.
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the ability
relating
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to relate
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 well with
people
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 makes you enjoy your
work
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. If a person does not speak much and believes his background studies might cause him serious problems.
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, no
one
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 will try to help you if you do not ask
help
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for help
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 and your co-workers believe that you know everything. If you relate to the
people
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with who
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who
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whom
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 you
work
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, your
work
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 starts being enjoyable. We spend most of our life at
work
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, so being enjoyed at the
work
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 is essential.
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, if you do not have a good relationship with
people
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, you might hate working//supporting each other// bond will be strong//.
This
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 will ruin your
career
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,
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 because you will not go
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work
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 on time and do not want to spend time in your office.
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, your director will think to resign you. If you relate to the
people
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 you will not have these problems.
To conclude
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, I think that relating to
people
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 is the
way
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 of being successful in your
career
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. If you do not relate
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people
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to people
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 at the
work
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,
this
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 might lead you
failure
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to failure
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 in your
career
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.
This
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 is because
that
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your
work
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 will be difficult for you, your day will not be enjoyable, and you might be resigned from your
work
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.

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