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The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in 2010

The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in 2010
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The pie chart provides the percentage of
average
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the average
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 expense of
family
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families
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 in
Japan
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 and
malaysia
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Malaysia
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 in the year 2010.
Overall
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 , transport holds the largest segment in
Japan
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while
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 the proportion of
cost
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the cost
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 of food is highest in Malaysia.
Meanwhile
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 Healthcare
account
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accounts
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the
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for the
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 lowest in both
Japan
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 and
malaysia
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Malaysia
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. In
Japan
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, the most expenditure is on
trasnport
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transport
of
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at
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 29% and Health care holds the lowest
segement
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segment
of
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at
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 6%.Food is the second largest
segement
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segment
 in
japan
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of
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21% and

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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