The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in 2010

The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in 2010
The pie chart provides the percentage of
average
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the average
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expense of
family
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families
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in
Japan
and
malaysia
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in the year 2010.
Overall
, transport holds the largest segment in
Japan
while
the proportion of
cost
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the cost
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of food is highest in Malaysia.
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Healthcare
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the
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lowest in both
Japan
and
malaysia
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. In
Japan
, the most expenditure is on
trasnport
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transport
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29% and Health care holds the lowest
segement
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segment
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6%.Food is the second largest
segement
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segment
in
japan
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21% and
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