The graph below shows the Qatari and Omani import totals (in tonnes) for several types of vegetables.
The pie graphs depict information about the total quantity of many kinds of vegetables import to Qatari and Omani. The data has been calibrated in
tonnes
.
After analysing the pie charts, it can be seen clearly that a negligible difference was seen in the number of broccoli deliver in both continents. In contrast
, 340 tonnes
of garlic send to Qatar, while
almost twofold in the
Oman. Correct article usage
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A
identical amount of ginger is Change the article
An
importing
to both countries which constitute Wrong verb form
imported
for
300 Change preposition
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tonnes
Moving further
, 450 tonnes
of spinach is transforming to the first region, while
in Omani, it increased by 150 tonnes
however
, a difference was seen at 250 tonnes
in both pie figures.
Overall
, it is crystal clear that the maximum count of spinach conveys to the former nation, whilst in the latter land, the minimum vegetables are dispatching named broccoli and ginger.Submitted by deepikanayyar1996
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