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The graph below shows the Qatari and Omani import totals (in tonnes) for several types of vegetables.

The graph below shows the Qatari and Omani import totals (in tonnes) for several types of vegetables.
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The pie graphs depict information about the total quantity of many kinds of vegetables import to Qatari and Omani. The data has been calibrated in
tonnes
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. After analysing the pie charts, it can be seen clearly that a negligible difference was seen in the number of broccoli deliver in both continents.
In contrast
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, 340
tonnes
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 of garlic send to Qatar,
while
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 almost twofold in
the
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apply
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Oman.
A
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An
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 identical amount of ginger is
importing
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imported
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 to both countries which constitute
for
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apply
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300
tonnes
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 Moving
further
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, 450
tonnes
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 of spinach is transforming to the first region,
while
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 in Omani, it increased by 150
tonnes
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however
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, a difference was seen at 250
tonnes
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 in both pie figures.
Overall
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, it is crystal clear that the maximum count of spinach conveys to the former nation, whilst in the latter land, the minimum vegetables are dispatching named broccoli and ginger.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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