It is believed that secondary school children should study international news as one of their school subjects. Others think this is a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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some people think that secondary school pupils should study foreign
news
as one of their school subjects, others are of the view
this
is a waste of valuable school time. In my opinion,
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of
news
as part of the
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academic
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will be of benefit to the student. On one hand, some individuals agree that the value of
information
can be accessed by the impact it makes on the bearer, based on
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line of thought, the effect of
this
world
news
on the life of the individual is scarcely tangible. The case of a girl in Nigeria with
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of becoming a banker, a change of monetary policy in the UK,
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of unemployment and
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cost in China,
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death of Queen Elizabeth does not help in ensuring she attains her objective, rather it burdens her as she now allocates time to its study.
On the other hand
, with globalization, the earth has become a tech village and events in one region
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effect to other areas of the globe, making
information
a necessity for survival and proper global positioning in
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and future, irrespective of its current level of impact on an individual.
For example
,
news
of a war between Russia and
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States of America will cause lots of changes in world trade, like a drop in the value of the dollar, for a Forex trader,
this
scenario can make or mare him for life. The line between success and failure is
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and a need for wholistic
information
can not be
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, in view of
this
, including international
news
as a subject will better position students for
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tomorrow
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