Beside a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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modern
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world,
internet
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the internet
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which is used almost
in
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every step by us takes up a large area
in
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of
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our lives and is thought by some it has detrimental effects on us. In my opinion, I completely agree that
internet
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the internet
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causes some
problems
on
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in
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our lives and cyberbullying and
information
pollution are the two immense
problems
which are stemming from
this
source.
Initially
, cyberbullying is one of the most prominent and rapidly spreading
problems
of our time caused by the
Internet
.
Mostly
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people who have little confidence are trying to hurt someone over the
Internet
. People can be threatened
about
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posting lies or embarrassing photos on social media about them.
Therefore
this
type of bullying caused insurmountable
problems
.
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instance
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in Ganja,
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a fifteen
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fifteen year old
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teenager committed suicide
due to
cyberbullying. Another point to mention is
Information
pollution which is one of
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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Internet
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the Internet
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creates. In
this
age, people can access
every
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the
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information
which they want to know.
However
, spreading invalid knowledge
gain
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through
internet
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the internet
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, caused to increase
information
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in information
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pollution.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Consumer behavior
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