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Many people say that the only way to guarantee getting a good job is to complete a course of university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the era of globalization with the competitiveness of the employment system now, getting a better job alongside a great
position
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, especially in a well-known
company
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 is everybody’s dream. Getting a good job requires several indicators of the quality of a
person
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, both soft skills and hard skills, and
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 can be assessed by having evidence of completing a course in university education. I firmly agree with
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 and will discuss the importance of having an educational degree to exercise for a dream
position
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 in the workplace.
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 with, looking from a more macro-perspective at a country level, having a degree from a university has become an indicator that some countries use in their national or local regulation to asses its people quality.
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, in Indonesia’s employment system today, in order to apply for a
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 as a special staff in a Ministry office, a
person
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 needs to have at least a graduate degree.
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 we can specify on to more micro level,
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 as in a
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, in looking for a suitable candidate, a
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 tends to assess their employee background and
behavior
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behaviour
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 toward commitment.
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, if a
company
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 wants to learn about a potential candidate’s commitment, they will learn how a
person
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 studies and finishes courses at the university level. If a
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 hadn’t finished their courses
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 the employer may be preassumed that
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person
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 shows a lack of commitment.
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, completing a course plays a major role in a
person
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’s process of getting into a good
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, at least, it could become a ticket for a
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 to compare to those who might have not finished any course.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • guarantee a good job
  • university education
  • in-depth knowledge
  • specialized skills
  • professional fields
  • vocational training
  • apprenticeships
  • high-paying
  • fulfilling jobs
  • trades
  • self-taught skills
  • expertise
  • success
  • entrepreneurs
  • practical experience
  • personal drive
  • financial burden
  • tuition fees
  • student loans
  • alternative pathways
  • job market
  • valuing skills
  • formal education
  • hands-on ability
  • academic qualifications
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