The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
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The table illustrates the
number
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of
Ashdown
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Museum
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's visitor during the
period
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of
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before and after
refurbishment
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during the year,
while
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the pie chart
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the satisfaction levels of guest during the two periods.
Overall
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, the
number
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of visitors who went to
Ashdown
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Museum
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before it was refurbished was higher than those who went after
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.
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,
while
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the
number
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of
people
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who were dissatisfied level in before the
refurbishment
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period
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was the highest proportion, the
number
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of visitors who were satisfied in the
period
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after
refurbishment
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was the most. The
number
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of visitors who went to
Ashdown
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Museum
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before
refurbishment
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was less than those who went there the after
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period
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, accounting for 74,000 and 92,000. Turning to visitor satisfaction,
people
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who went to
Ashdown
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Museum
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before
refurbishment
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had dissatisfied and very dissatisfied,
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the
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half, being responsible for 40 and 10
people
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, respectively.
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the
number
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of
people
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who had very satisfied was 15, there are 30
people
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who were satisfied. In the after-
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period
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, the figure for
people
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who were very satisfied and were satisfied was over half, at 35 and 40, respectively.
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,the proportion of
people
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who had dissatisfied was 15 and the figure for
people
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who were very dissatisfied and no response
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equal at 5.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, ashdown, museum, period, refurbishment, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor statistics
  • satisfaction survey
  • seasonal trends
  • demographics
  • benchmarking
  • feedback mechanisms
  • amenities
  • exhibitions
  • customer experience
  • turnaround
  • user engagement
  • footfall
  • improvements
  • disparities
  • perception
  • enhancements
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