The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
The table illustrates the
number
of
Ashdown
Museum
's visitor during the
period
of
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before and after
refurbishment
during the year,
while
the pie chart
display
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the satisfaction levels of guest during the two periods.
Overall
, the
number
of visitors who went to
Ashdown
Museum
before it was refurbished was higher than those who went after
refurbishment
.
In addition
,
while
the
number
of
people
who were dissatisfied level in before the
refurbishment
period
was the highest proportion, the
number
of visitors who were satisfied in the
period
after
refurbishment
was the most. The
number
of visitors who went to
Ashdown
Museum
before
refurbishment
was less than those who went there the after
period
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, accounting for 74,000 and 92,000. Turning to visitor satisfaction,
people
who went to
Ashdown
Museum
before
refurbishment
had dissatisfied and very dissatisfied,
at
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the
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half, being responsible for 40 and 10
people
, respectively.
While
the
number
of
people
who had very satisfied was 15, there are 30
people
who were satisfied. In the after-
refurbishment
period
, the figure for
people
who were very satisfied and were satisfied was over half, at 35 and 40, respectively.
In addition
,the proportion of
people
who had dissatisfied was 15 and the figure for
people
who were very dissatisfied and no response
were
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was
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equal at 5.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor statistics
  • satisfaction survey
  • seasonal trends
  • demographics
  • benchmarking
  • feedback mechanisms
  • amenities
  • exhibitions
  • customer experience
  • turnaround
  • user engagement
  • footfall
  • improvements
  • disparities
  • perception
  • enhancements
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