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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
Hello! My name is Dana, I’m finishing the 10th grade
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 year. Next year I’m going to enter The Chinese University of
HongKong
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Hong Kong
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, which is located in Shenzhen.
Body paragraph 1
Few
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A few
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 days ago I had a chance to ask some
questions
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 that interest me and
marketing
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the marketing
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 coordinator answered me very clearly. I want to share with you some of my insights.
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First of all, you need to read all the information on the website very carefully. The information is very clear. It contains some facts about which types of scholarship the CUHK provides,
entry
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 requirements.
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, you can find some photos of your future room in a dormitory and so on.
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if you have some
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, you can send an email to CUHK. In case you have a wide range of
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, you can arrange a video meeting with
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the marketing
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 coordinator through
email
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 box, as I have done.
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Before the meeting, I prepared a list of
questions
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 that I would like to ask.
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 I got my answers.
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The most essential documents related to education when \you apply for a scholarship are a transcript with grades from the 10th grade and OGE results.
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, you need to pass the international English exams.
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Don't apply too late! Keep up with the dates and make a plan for your admission, write down all the dates, deadlines, and the approximate time for receiving an answer.
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If you are under 18 at the time of admission, like me,
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 don’t worry, the university will take
responsbility
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responsibility
. It
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 accepts minors.
Conclusion
Thanks for watching. I hope to see
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you in
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 the CUHK in Shenzhen later! Bye-bye!

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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