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Write an e-mail to the bookshop. In your e-mail: • suggest a speaker • say what they would contribute to the event • explain why other people would be interested too

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Dear John, I am writing to share my preferred speaker for the recently announced talk series at your bookshop. Mr Peter is a motivational speaker with vast knowledge
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 psychology and has done dozens of events across London. With his background, he has addressed common problems like parenting, finding happiness and many other topics related to general living in his speeches, which I find useful. Having said that he is funny and friendly in his approach to events. Many who have attended his sessions have praised his
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knowledge
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 expressing joy in attending the talk. Recently our town has been going through tough times and I believe Mr Khan would spread some positive vibes with his witty words. Apparently, his parents spent most of their childhood in our town. Having
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 closeness to our town would
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While
 thanking you for your sincere efforts, I hope my suggestion works well. I look forward
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 the event. Regards, Aravinthan
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