A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas. What problems can this causes? How migth these problems be reduced?

Nowadays, improving the conditions of city life is more visible than in rural areas.
Although
it seems more valuable at the first glance, it brings some disadvantages with it. There are some ways to reduce
this
problem, but the government's role has the most effect on it to tackle these difficulties. The high-level standard situation in
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area leads to emigrating more rustic residents to cities to have better lives. which
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to
further
problems like overcrowded society, air pollution and sound pollution. It caused
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construct more housing areas with more furnishings for them,
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more spaces for them to
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so that we have fewer greenery zone compared with the more greenery fields. The other problem is we lose the gorgeous view of our villages by
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of attention to them by governments and residents. There must be more local people to stay to make more facilities
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their land and protect more for their natural around
instead
of moving to towns and destroying trees to make more wooden material for urban citizens.
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there are several approaches to
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these issues, the government has a significant role in it. It can encourage the rural community to stay in their area by providing some sort of
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opportunities
like health centres, better educational departments, making
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attractive resting areas and so on. Having more advantages in
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the countryside
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to encourage the population to stay, brings equal rations of
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the population
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between these two inhabitants zones. In conclusion,
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raising the standard of urban's life is irrefragable, developing more benefits in rural conditions to prevent
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rustic population's migration to cities is one of the government's duties.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disparity
  • socio-economic inequalities
  • urban migration
  • overpopulation
  • neglect
  • infrastructure
  • stifle
  • economic growth
  • agricultural production
  • food security
  • cultural erosion
  • rural development
  • sustainable agricultural practices
  • cultural preservation
  • foster
  • economic independence
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